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PostSubject: Hirari Story Team App   Mon Oct 25, 2010 4:31 pm

Should I really do this? o3o; -pressured by twin again-
um...okay anyways... Hi.

Name: Hirari
Age: %(@&&% still not telling >_< Anyways Annie and Matt know.
Grade Level: %(@&!^%(2 THIS WILL GIVE OUT MY AGE.
Grade in English: A for every single semester in my life -3-
Stories: lol seriously....
heres the start of MS Heroes: http://mapleevolution.heavenforum.org/literature-f63/ms-heroes-part-i-t357.htm
and the start of MS Knights: http://mapleevolution.heavenforum.org/literature-f63/ms-knights-part-i-t359.htm
DM: http://mapleevolution.heavenforum.org/literature-f63/digimon-memorial-part-i-t365.htm
DMR: http://mapleevolution.heavenforum.org/literature-f63/digimon-memorial-revolution-part-i-t371.htm
and a sad little story: http://mapleevolution.heavenforum.org/literature-f63/december-8-t387.htm
Why I want to be in Story Team: Because I write a lot (as you can tell) and as a girl I like to get lost in fantasy stories 8D -drools- And also cuz my twin said so o.o


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PostSubject: Re: Hirari Story Team App   Mon Oct 25, 2010 7:02 pm

^ LOL TWIN... >_>

Go ahead, Matt. You do the job o3o~
(laziness~~~ <3)

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PostSubject: Re: Hirari Story Team App   Mon Oct 25, 2010 10:00 pm

Approved by Uri.
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PostSubject: Re: Hirari Story Team App   Tue Oct 26, 2010 5:40 am

-stamps forehead~
SUNNIE'S STAMP OF APPROVAL <3 <3 :P
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PostSubject: Re: Hirari Story Team App   Tue Oct 26, 2010 5:53 am

-stamps Sunnie- Hirari I Approve your joining of the story team

w8 a minute.....
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PostSubject: Re: Hirari Story Team App   Tue Oct 26, 2010 5:57 am

LOLOLOL, LUNA!! DD:
I'M NOT HIRARIII. ;A;
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PostSubject: Re: Hirari Story Team App   Tue Oct 26, 2010 7:42 am

WTF DIGIMON NO

I'll Cnc later.

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PostSubject: Re: Hirari Story Team App   Wed Oct 27, 2010 6:40 pm

Hirari wrote:
Should I really do this? o3o; -pressured by twin again-

YESH, YOU SHOULD STILL DO IT! DON`T HESITATE!
YOU. HAVE. POTENTIAL. derp. o3o

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PostSubject: Re: Hirari Story Team App   Wed Nov 03, 2010 8:42 am

Annie, your job to grade it. :P

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PostSubject: Re: Hirari Story Team App   Wed Nov 03, 2010 9:26 am

^All the Digimonness gave you headaches? =p
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PostSubject: Re: Hirari Story Team App   Wed Nov 03, 2010 5:24 pm

OH MAH FAWKING GODDDDDD. D:
(bet he`s gonna take away leader job after i grade >_>)



BUT FINE.
I`LL GRADE NON-DIGIMON SCHUFFS.

c:

i still love you, hirari <3

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PostSubject: Re: Hirari Story Team App   Wed Nov 03, 2010 9:39 pm

*DON'T COUNT THIS AS DOUBLE POST >:C*

+ LOL. There is something called a "comma". XD I noticed some of your sentences are sooo long, with no pauses, and sometimes it just doesn't make sense anymore. o3o So yeah, use commas!
+ "bigger" (second paragraph)? Wouldn`t "older" sound a bit more right? XD
+ I found a few typos. Nothing big, so it doesn't matter much here.
+ Some sentences seem like it`s missing a few words.
+ You have a few tense problems. Just a few.
+ The story is a bit cliche, and it happened too fast. (read below)

**Further In-Depth**
Please Take A Deep Breath First! (This is going to be ugly.):
 

**Result**
I Still Love You, Really <3:
 

Sorry. T^T
I think I`m just as strict as Matt...

-hugs Hirari-

ily. <3

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